Extract from my #NaNoWriMo A Life in After World: WeFair- #pirates

I have already beaten the 50K word goal of NaNoWriMo, but the story is long from finished.  I have much more story to tell and I am working to try to tell it all by the end of the month.

There are several sea battles that take places and I particularly like this exchange between a ship captain and a Comche (Pirate) Captain.  It introduces a character that is more of a weapon than a person that is called Dervish.  He is an ex-Comche pirate that has made an oath of Loyalty to a Captain in the Westwaters.  Dervish is dangerous and psychotic especially when wielding his twin over-sized curved swords.  Killing brings him joy.  His skills are used sparingly as he usually does not know when to stop killing.

Enjoy this short extract between the captains:

Near the junction of the two ships stood the captain of the Comche force.  He recognized her by the facial tattoos worn by Comche captains.  He sliced a path towards her and she saw him coming and stood prepared as he approached.

“Hola, Capitán.”  She said brandishing her sword before him.

“I don’t think I have had the pleasure.”  Shaft said.  “What name am I to put in my log books under name of pirate killed?”

She smirked.  “Soy Capitán Trituradora, y tú?”

“Captain WeShaft Earlborn.”  He informed her.

“Earlborn?”  She commented. “Va a hacer un buen tatuaje.”

He shook his head at her.  “Not today.  Did you know I have Dervish here?”

“Derviche?”  Her eyes grew wide and she quickly scanned the battlefield.  She made a quick cross sign across her chest.  “Aquí?”

Captain WeShaft pointed through the battle towards the schooner on the other side of his ship.  As they both looked that way the upper half of a body came tumbling over the gunwale.

“Since he left the Comche, he has become a great asset to our navy.”

“Usted todavía morirán este día!”  She spit down at his boots.  “Y voy a tener en mi nuevo barco.”

“How do you say?”  Weshaft said.  “No hoy!”

I reached 50K! 8:30PM CT 1/21/2013 – Guess my 50K word #NaNoWriMo

Yay me!  I have reached 50K on my novel for National Novel Writing Month!

My novel is a compliment novel to last year’s entry that tells the opposite side of the story and then picks up where the previous novel left off.

This Novel is called A Life in After World: WeFair.

Last Year’s is called A Life in After World: SoGlog.

the 50K sentence?

“He said we had mice.”  He stopped his pacing of their quarters to shake his finger at her.  “I bet he brought them on his train!

That’s right!  The awesome word to hit 50K on is train.

The mice referred to here are actually a type of demi-human that lives off the garbage of society.  Check out their race page.


29K to go, still chugging along tonight on #NaNoWriMo

Things are going very well in the After World this evening.  I have completed around 2200 words so far this evening and plan on going on, but I thought I would stop and give an update as to where I am so far.  I am nearing half of the target already at 8 days in and averaging over 2500 words per day.

nanowrimo day 8

Is this scene too racy? #NaNoWriMo

My novel is pretty well PG, No cuss words, no description of sex though it may be alluded to at times.  The following scene though just laid itself down in my manuscript and I need your opinion if it is too racy.  It is between two train engineers standing around talking and being men:

“Nothing quite that exciting on the Eastern North South Line.”  Hodge said then lit up a little.  “I did see a couple doing it on the tracks the other day.”

Thomas made a face at him.

“Yeah.  Butt naked and racing to finish up before I ran them down.”  Hodge said.  “There was no way I could have stopped in time.”

Thomas smirked and chuckled.  “They make it?”

“Nope.”  Hodge said simply.

Thomas looked astonished.

“He had to finish her on the siding.”  Hodge said with a wicked grin.

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